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jeriendhal) wrote2008-09-22 02:35 pm
jeriendhal) wrote2008-09-22 02:35 pm
Wierd Trek Dreams
For some reason I keep imagining ST:TWOK done up as a "final episode" of Star Trek the Original Series, in some wierd alternate universe where NBC got a hold of the Neilsen demographic ratings on time and commissioned Roddenberry for another series, starring the original cast but with upgraded (I mean REALLY upgraded, to 21st century CGI) effects. It follows the same basic plot, but with some changes
Time Period: The tail end of the Enterprise's original 5 year mission. We can assume (adding all the boring off screen moments) the first three seasons are the full five years, especially if you add in the Animated Series stuff.
Prolog: Same as before, with Saavik trashing the E in the Kobayashi Maru sim. Dialog with Spock afterward IDs Saavik as being raised on Vulcan as an orphan (her background from the novels as a half-Romulan would come out as the series went on) and that their five year mission has just ended. The E is at Starbase One, getting ready for a milk run, shuttling a large group of cadets back to Starfleet Academy on Earth.
Chat With Scotty (New Scene): Just prior to McCoy giving his birthday present, Kirk first gets a visit from Scotty in his cabin with some bad news. After an inspection by the drydock engineers, the E's warp pylons are showing microcracks due to all the combat and stress she's seen the past few years. It would be cheaper to build a whole new starship rather than do repairs, so this is going to be the big E's last mission. Kirk takes the news badly, but in the end asks Scotty when they could be ready to launch. Scotty replies, "In about 12 hours, Captain, but since you're usually in a hurry, we can go in three on your word". Basically a repeat of the "Standard estimates" bit from ST III.
Kirk's Birthday (modified scene): Same scene as originally with McCoy, with one additional bit. Kick shows McCoy his new orders. He's to assigned to Starfleet Academy as its new commandant, being considered a hero for the E's wildly sucessful mission and too valuable to place at risk now.
The Reliant (modified): The major difference here is that Sulu is the First Officer. Also (because I've got Vulpines on the brain) Captain Terrel is now Captain Brushtail, a Vulp vixen with a tart sense of humor and no more patience at being at Dr. Marcus' beck and call.
Marcus (arguing over discovering life on "Ceti Alpha 4"): Captain Brushtail, I understand your impatience, but I'm not going to compromise the survey protocol...
Brushtail: And I hope you understand that the Reliant is a vessel of the United Federation of Planet Starfleet, not Dr. Carol Marcus' personal yacht. We have been at this survey mission for nearly eighteen months, with absolutely nothing to show for it, a fact I intend to make clear in my next report to Starfleet Headquarters.
Things go downhill from there, pretty much as in the original movie, but with Khan's recognition of Sulu actually making sense in the context of the "Space Seed" episode.
(Note: In this version, David Marcus is played by Bill Mumy or "Ronny" Howard, age 15 or so and still an annoying Kid Genius.)
The Cadets Board/Enterprise Launch: Same as before, except that during the boarding, Kirk serrupticiously catches a conversation between Uhura and Chekov. Uhura is telling Chekov that she's resigning her commission, having grown disenchanted with being a "Glorified Switchboard Operator". Kirk is dismayed, comparing her achievements during their mission to his own.
As in the TV movie cut and the novelization, Ensign Preston is Scotty's nephew.
Things mostly follow the same plot as the movie, with some additions:
During ambush by the Reliant, when Kirk tricks Khan with the R's recognition codes, it falls straight on Uhura's shoulders to transmit the orders quickly to disable the R's shields. Afterward, Kirk turns to her and says pointedly, "You're a helluva lot more than a switchboard operator, Lieutenant!"
When they beam down to the Genesis cave and get the update on the E's repairs, Kirk asks for a ETA.
Spock: Using Mr Scott's "standard calculations", it will be at least 48 hours before they are complete.
Kirk: Understood, Mr. Spock.
The Showdown: Proceeds mostly as before, but the Enterprise taking greater damage, with one of the warp nacelle being completely destroyed. Limping away from the activated Genesis Device on impulse power, with Scotty still in dispair over the death of his nephew, we get the following dialog:
Kirk: Scotty, I need warp power in ten minutes or we're all dead.
Scotty: Ye don't understand, sir! The port warp nacelle is completely destroyed. D'ya not understand ye bloody arrogant ass, I can't fix it this time!
Dead silence on the bridge for a BEAT as a suddenly shamefaced Scotty realizes he's just crossed the line.
Kirk (coldly): You're dismissed, Mr. Scott.
Scott: Aye, Captain.
SCOTTY exits via the tubolift, shoulders hunched. KIRK turns to SPOCK, looking for an answer, any answer.
KIRK: Spock, options?
SPOCK: We are faced with the most basic of physics problems, Captain. Given a fixed rate of thrust, the only means to increase our rate of acceleration is to signifigantly decrease our mass.
BEAT as KIRK realizes what Spock is suggesting.
KIRK: Understood, Mr. Spock
Punches a button on his chair arm.
(con't. Amplified)
All hands, this is the captain. Prepare for emergency saucer seperation. I repeat, evacuate the secondary engineering hull and prepare for emergency saucer seperation!
Montage of scenes with cadets and crew scrambling to get out of the lower hull. Near the end it's discovered that the remote detonators for the seperation charges are malfuntioning. Scotty seals the bulkhead to the secondary hull once everyone else has gotten out and goes down to detonate them manually. Despite his attempt at self-sacrifice, Ensign Kyle beams him to safety at the last possible moment.
Once free of the shattered secondary hull, the saucer section's acceleration visibly increases. Khan is impotently furious as he realizes Kirk might yet escape. Kirk is less sanguine.
Kirk: Are we going to make it, Spock?
Spock: Unknown, Captain. Even at our current rate of acceleration, we will still be in the margin of error for the Genesis Device's activation radius.
Carol: The field will just keep expanding until it has enough mass to form a planet.
Kirk: How much mass?
The Genesis device detonates, expanding outward and consuming the Mutara Nebula. It stops just as it consumes the E's secondary hull. The command hull takes up orbit around the newly formed Genesis Planet. We have Kirk and Carol's conversation about birth and feeling young, then Kirk adds:
Kirk: Mr. Scott, do we have enough power to beam down?
Scotty (having been previously forgiven by Kirk after saving the ship): Aye, Captain.
Kirk: Excellent. Mr. Spock prepare a landing party.
Spock: Captain?
Kirk (given him a young man's smile): We've got a whole new planet down there, Mr. Spock. Let's explore!
Fade to credits as the theme music starts triumphantly.
Time Period: The tail end of the Enterprise's original 5 year mission. We can assume (adding all the boring off screen moments) the first three seasons are the full five years, especially if you add in the Animated Series stuff.
Prolog: Same as before, with Saavik trashing the E in the Kobayashi Maru sim. Dialog with Spock afterward IDs Saavik as being raised on Vulcan as an orphan (her background from the novels as a half-Romulan would come out as the series went on) and that their five year mission has just ended. The E is at Starbase One, getting ready for a milk run, shuttling a large group of cadets back to Starfleet Academy on Earth.
Chat With Scotty (New Scene): Just prior to McCoy giving his birthday present, Kirk first gets a visit from Scotty in his cabin with some bad news. After an inspection by the drydock engineers, the E's warp pylons are showing microcracks due to all the combat and stress she's seen the past few years. It would be cheaper to build a whole new starship rather than do repairs, so this is going to be the big E's last mission. Kirk takes the news badly, but in the end asks Scotty when they could be ready to launch. Scotty replies, "In about 12 hours, Captain, but since you're usually in a hurry, we can go in three on your word". Basically a repeat of the "Standard estimates" bit from ST III.
Kirk's Birthday (modified scene): Same scene as originally with McCoy, with one additional bit. Kick shows McCoy his new orders. He's to assigned to Starfleet Academy as its new commandant, being considered a hero for the E's wildly sucessful mission and too valuable to place at risk now.
The Reliant (modified): The major difference here is that Sulu is the First Officer. Also (because I've got Vulpines on the brain) Captain Terrel is now Captain Brushtail, a Vulp vixen with a tart sense of humor and no more patience at being at Dr. Marcus' beck and call.
Marcus (arguing over discovering life on "Ceti Alpha 4"): Captain Brushtail, I understand your impatience, but I'm not going to compromise the survey protocol...
Brushtail: And I hope you understand that the Reliant is a vessel of the United Federation of Planet Starfleet, not Dr. Carol Marcus' personal yacht. We have been at this survey mission for nearly eighteen months, with absolutely nothing to show for it, a fact I intend to make clear in my next report to Starfleet Headquarters.
Things go downhill from there, pretty much as in the original movie, but with Khan's recognition of Sulu actually making sense in the context of the "Space Seed" episode.
(Note: In this version, David Marcus is played by Bill Mumy or "Ronny" Howard, age 15 or so and still an annoying Kid Genius.)
The Cadets Board/Enterprise Launch: Same as before, except that during the boarding, Kirk serrupticiously catches a conversation between Uhura and Chekov. Uhura is telling Chekov that she's resigning her commission, having grown disenchanted with being a "Glorified Switchboard Operator". Kirk is dismayed, comparing her achievements during their mission to his own.
As in the TV movie cut and the novelization, Ensign Preston is Scotty's nephew.
Things mostly follow the same plot as the movie, with some additions:
During ambush by the Reliant, when Kirk tricks Khan with the R's recognition codes, it falls straight on Uhura's shoulders to transmit the orders quickly to disable the R's shields. Afterward, Kirk turns to her and says pointedly, "You're a helluva lot more than a switchboard operator, Lieutenant!"
When they beam down to the Genesis cave and get the update on the E's repairs, Kirk asks for a ETA.
Spock: Using Mr Scott's "standard calculations", it will be at least 48 hours before they are complete.
Kirk: Understood, Mr. Spock.
The Showdown: Proceeds mostly as before, but the Enterprise taking greater damage, with one of the warp nacelle being completely destroyed. Limping away from the activated Genesis Device on impulse power, with Scotty still in dispair over the death of his nephew, we get the following dialog:
Kirk: Scotty, I need warp power in ten minutes or we're all dead.
Scotty: Ye don't understand, sir! The port warp nacelle is completely destroyed. D'ya not understand ye bloody arrogant ass, I can't fix it this time!
Dead silence on the bridge for a BEAT as a suddenly shamefaced Scotty realizes he's just crossed the line.
Kirk (coldly): You're dismissed, Mr. Scott.
Scott: Aye, Captain.
SCOTTY exits via the tubolift, shoulders hunched. KIRK turns to SPOCK, looking for an answer, any answer.
KIRK: Spock, options?
SPOCK: We are faced with the most basic of physics problems, Captain. Given a fixed rate of thrust, the only means to increase our rate of acceleration is to signifigantly decrease our mass.
BEAT as KIRK realizes what Spock is suggesting.
KIRK: Understood, Mr. Spock
Punches a button on his chair arm.
(con't. Amplified)
All hands, this is the captain. Prepare for emergency saucer seperation. I repeat, evacuate the secondary engineering hull and prepare for emergency saucer seperation!
Montage of scenes with cadets and crew scrambling to get out of the lower hull. Near the end it's discovered that the remote detonators for the seperation charges are malfuntioning. Scotty seals the bulkhead to the secondary hull once everyone else has gotten out and goes down to detonate them manually. Despite his attempt at self-sacrifice, Ensign Kyle beams him to safety at the last possible moment.
Once free of the shattered secondary hull, the saucer section's acceleration visibly increases. Khan is impotently furious as he realizes Kirk might yet escape. Kirk is less sanguine.
Kirk: Are we going to make it, Spock?
Spock: Unknown, Captain. Even at our current rate of acceleration, we will still be in the margin of error for the Genesis Device's activation radius.
Carol: The field will just keep expanding until it has enough mass to form a planet.
Kirk: How much mass?
The Genesis device detonates, expanding outward and consuming the Mutara Nebula. It stops just as it consumes the E's secondary hull. The command hull takes up orbit around the newly formed Genesis Planet. We have Kirk and Carol's conversation about birth and feeling young, then Kirk adds:
Kirk: Mr. Scott, do we have enough power to beam down?
Scotty (having been previously forgiven by Kirk after saving the ship): Aye, Captain.
Kirk: Excellent. Mr. Spock prepare a landing party.
Spock: Captain?
Kirk (given him a young man's smile): We've got a whole new planet down there, Mr. Spock. Let's explore!
Fade to credits as the theme music starts triumphantly.
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